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nice job you got there sis .. but this is your paragraph with my correction
Last Friday the weather was very nice(dazzeling), so I didn’t go to college by car, I walked. While I was going across the park, I saw a peice of metal on the ground. When I went closer, i figured out that it was a keyring. I took it went to school afterwards. I showed it to my friend and I asked her if she knew anything about this keychain, but she replied bake with denial. Then she asked me to report the keychain to the Police Station. After school, I went home and showed the keychain to my parents. They told me that i have to go to the Police Station. Two days later, I went to the Police Station and gave the keychain to an officer. He wrote down my name and address. One week later, he called my father asking him to show up in the police station. So i accompanied my father to the police station. When I arrived ther, I saw a big man, he was a giant, so I was afraid. Later, he asked me about my name and some personal questions. The policeman said, “This man is a famous business man and the keychain belongs to him,” Afterwards, the business man gave me €100 and gave my father €200. I was really amazed. He told us that he was looking for the keychain since two weeks ago. He thanked me and my father. The last time I saw him he was very happy.
and thats it .. this way .. it would be perfect .... gramatically and literaly speaking
أخوكم
سعـــــــــــــــــــــود بن عبد العزيز
السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
nice job you got there sis .. but this is your paragraph with my correction
Last Friday the weather was very nice(dazzeling), so I didn’t go to college by car, I walked. While I was going across the park, I saw a peice of metal on the ground. When I went closer, i figured out that it was a keyring. I took it went to school afterwards. I showed it to my friend and I asked her if she knew anything about this keychain, but she replied bake with denial. Then she asked me to report the keychain to the Police Station. After school, I went home and showed the keychain to my parents. They told me that i have to go to the Police Station. Two days later, I went to the Police Station and gave the keychain to an officer. He wrote down my name and address. One week later, he called my father asking him to show up in the police station. So i accompanied my father to the police station. When I arrived ther, I saw a big man, he was a giant, so I was afraid. Later, he asked me about my name and some personal questions. The policeman said, “This man is a famous business man and the keychain belongs to him,” Afterwards, the business man gave me €100 and gave my father €200. I was really amazed. He told us that he was looking for the keychain since two weeks ago. He thanked me and my father. The last time I saw him he was very happy.
and thats it .. this way .. it would be perfect .... gramatically and literaly speaking
أخوكم
سعـــــــــــــــــــــود بن عبد العزيز
